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Post by thestreetdetective on Sept 24, 2006 18:07:08 GMT -5
Yeah that would help. Anyone wanna make a fan art for it?
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Post by shooshoo on Sept 25, 2006 2:18:22 GMT -5
i read the 2 files ... they were really interesting but can i give you my notes... 1- the story very nice but you didn't give us more allusions about his character and his life .... 2- you didn't do s/th strange in the story like dc .... the strange thing and make dc very popular the shrunk issue and the BO... sorry if my notes were cruel but i want the best for you i will try thinging of s/th new make the story more exciting about the fanart i can draw juno design appearance ... but first we must talk about how he is look like
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Post by halfxasleep on Sept 25, 2006 22:46:31 GMT -5
gah finally got time to read great file I think I know what might of happened but I'll wait and see.
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Post by Kôkaku Kidôtai Tantei on Sept 25, 2006 23:25:35 GMT -5
I like it beacuse of the orginality...and the character
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Post by thestreetdetective on Sept 26, 2006 13:14:44 GMT -5
File 3. Hey so its so long but im new at this.
Juno- " This incident is finally starting to make some sense to me. Now it's time to start the show."
Masako- " Ha! I know what happened here."
Juno looks at the chief with an expression of surprise
Masako- "The only person who could have done this is you!"
Masako points at the cashier
Cashier- "Me?!"
Masako- " Your the only one who could have poisoned the coffee. All you had to do was slip it in when you got handed the cup."
Cashier- "No, i didn't do it!"
Juno- "He's right and besides if he tried to do that while infront of the customers it would look too suspicious"
Masako- "Fine then smarty, you tell me what went on here."
Juno- (Smiling) "Well normally i wouldn't, but since its for you I'll do it"
Juno- "First thing is first"
Juno takes out a dingy old penny
Juno-"Hey Mr.Shinji can you take this penny? I don't really like these old ones."
Shinji- "Umm sure okay."
Juno then "trips" into shinji and puts the penny into Shinji's pocket
Masako- "Hey kid, what the hell did you ask him to do that for?"
Juno- (Thinking)"Can't believe no one even asked if i was okay.(Outloud) That i will get to later. As you can recall the coffee of Mr.Hirorata was poisoned,but not as much as the straw was."
Masako- "Yeah so?"
Juno- "Don't you find that strange that the posion was mostly in the straw and only a little of it was in the coffee?"
Masako- "Well of course."
Juno-"That means that the poison was applied only to the straw and that the poison dripped from the straw into the bottom of the cup."
Masako-" That makes sense, but who did it?"
Juno-" Well if my deduction is correct it can only me one person;Mr. Shinji!"
Kyoji- "Shinji? don't make me laugh.Look kid you better stop playing this detective game! These are peoples lives here!"
Juno- "Well let me finish first. After you guys had recieved your cups Shinji went to go get the straws right?"
Rio- " Yeah he did.So what?"
Juno-" After that, he got hit and the straws fell onto the ground and he picked them up and gave them to you guys."
Kyoji- "What's your point?"
Juno- "The straws were opened when you got them from Shinji right?"
Rio- "Yeah thats right."
Juno- "Then isn't it strange how there were no wrappers left on the floor or on the counter?"
Masako- "Well that is strange, but he could have just thrown them away"
Cashier- " Yeah he could have, only we emptied the trash can before they came inside the shop and there is nothing in there."
Masako-" That is strange."
Juno-"I believe that that straws he gave to them were always unwrapped."
Masako-"So your saying that Shinji gave them different straws?"
Juno- "Well different from the ones that he recieved from the cashier atleast."
Masako-"And your proof is where?"
Juno-"Right here."
Juno reaches into Shinji's left pocket and pulls out for wrapped straws
Masako- "How did you know that they were there?"
Juno-"When i fell into him I saw a straw sticking out of his pocket"
Shinji- "So just because i have straws that makes me the culprit?"
Juno- "You will see when i get finished."
Juno-"So after Shinji got hit, he went over to pick up the straws and he switched the straws and included the one with the poison on it."
Masako-"Your theory only works if no one is looking."
Juno- "No one was looking. Everyone went to help Mr.Rio when i fell."
Masako-" Then Shinji got lucky"
Juno-"Lucky, yeah lucky he find a great partner."
Masako-"Partner? So then that means that..."
Juno-"Yeah, this crime was committed by two parties."
Juno-"Shinji could only switch the straws if no one was looking. Rio just then fell onto the ground and gave Shinji the time to switch. Then he fell again in order to give Shinji the time to make it look like he had already unwrapped the straws."
Masako- " So it was the timing at which he had fell that tipped you off?"
Juno- "Yeah,its to suspicious for someone to fall 3 times in that little span"
Masako- " 3? you only said two"
Juno-"Hold on. First lets finish up with the murderer."
Shinji- "Please do! I wanna know how i am the culprit here.I wanna know how i poisoned him"
Juno- "All will be revealed if you would be so kind as to give me back the penny"
Shinji's face turns pale
Shinji-"Why?! I thought you didn't like these old pennies!"
Juno-"Yeah but i just remembered that my mom collects them."
Masako-"Whats the big deal? Just give it to him."
Shinji-"No!He gave it to me and now its mine!"
Juno takes a napkin and reaches into Shinji's pocket and takes the penny
Shinji-"Hey!Give that back"
Juno-"Oh my what is this?"
Masako-"That penny looks brand new."
Juno-"Thats why he didn't want to give it to me. He knew that the potassium cyanide had reacted to the coin.So tell me how is it that you had potassium cyanide in your pocket?
Shinji-"Hmmph, because it was the least suspicious way of dealing with Hirorata."
Masako-"So you admit it?"
Shinji-"Yeah thats right i killed Hirorata"
Masako-"Even if you put potassium cyanide in the straw, there is no way Hirorata dies that fast without being noticed.Also how would he know what drink Hirorata would have?
Juno-"Which brings me back to Mr.Rio.He fell onto Mr.Hirorata while he was taking pills and knocked him to the ground. During that time he switched the pills with Axepoltye which is a drug used to speed up reactions, particular posions. It was made to kill things like rats and insects faster.If you check Mr.Hirorata's bottle im sure you will find Rio's fingerprints on the bottle and pills."
Masako-"Officier check that body and take it to the lab for analysis. That answers how he did so fast, but how would Shinji know which one he would drink?
officer 2- "Maybe he heard is order?"
Juno-"Even without knowing his order, he could still poison him if it was his own cup."
Masako-"So that means that Shinji poisoned his own cup?"
Juno-"Yeah, he mostly likely switched cups with Hirorata saying something like "They messed up the orders and gave me your drink by mistake, lets switch" before Hirorata could even take a sip of his drink.But thats only my speculation."
Masako-"Regardless, take the cups and analyze them also officer."
Officer 1- "Right"
Masako-"But why would they kill Hirorata?"
Juno-"Probably has to do with the newspaper story.That fact that both you and Mr.Rio worked togehter on this means that..."
Shinji-"Thats right. The incident at the plant was us. We wanted to make a headline story so instead of waiting for something to happen, we made it happen. Then last week we found out that Hirorata new about the incident and was going to tell the city that we had made the explosion. I tried to persuade him not to release our names but he said the scoop was to big. I was left with only one other option."
Masako-"Take them away."
Juno is now talking to the cashier
Juno- "Hey since i solved this case do I still gotta pay for the coffee?"
Masako-"Hey kid, you did good. Whats your name anyways?"
Juno- "Its Juno, Juno Katsuo. Thats J-U-N-O K-A-T-S-U-O in case my name gets in the paper."
Masako-" I will be sure to mention you. Well see you around, kid detective."
Juno-" Whatever, so about this coffee."
Juno then exits the shop and begins walking home
Man-"Yeah his name is Juno Katsuo.He's a little rough around the edges but he's good. It should be interesting to see what he can do for us. Yeah, i'll keep my eye on him."
End of File 3. Sorry that it is so long
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Post by shooshoo on Sept 26, 2006 13:34:51 GMT -5
woooooow very nice file... you really good writer ... the crimes details were so complicated ... how did you think of all that!!... thanks for the hard work ... you really know how to write about detective story ... i know it is hard but i hope to see your next file sooon ^^
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Post by halfxasleep on Sept 26, 2006 19:15:08 GMT -5
Amazing keep it up!
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Post by thestreetdetective on Sept 26, 2006 20:27:59 GMT -5
Thank you guys so much. that really means alot to me. You might see the next file between this weekend or next week. I won't make you wait that long. Oh yea i just read the last file for the Onibaba case and i didn't really like it. It didn't seem very Conan-y you know. Thats just me.
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Post by Kôkaku Kidôtai Tantei on Sept 27, 2006 20:22:18 GMT -5
even thought it didn't seem Conan-y I like because of the originality...I'm going havta keep n eye on ya'
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Post by thestreetdetective on Sept 27, 2006 22:38:53 GMT -5
hey thanks, you know what, file 4 will definetly be out this weekend
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Post by gamersgateway on Sept 29, 2006 13:20:02 GMT -5
We'll wait to see it .......... and Nice Detective Story........
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Post by thestreetdetective on Sept 30, 2006 1:48:18 GMT -5
Here y'all go the beginning of a new case. File 4
Juno is fast asleep Juno-"ZZZzzzz" Gloria-" JUNO KATSUO! WAKE UP RIGHT NOW!" Juno- (Thinking)" Oh crap." Gloria-" What time did you get home last night?" Juno-" I don't know, 11-11:30ish" Gloria-" Well you had better have a good excuse young man!" Juno- (Half asleep) " I was solving a crime down at the coffee shop" Gloria-" Liar! That woman Chief Masako solved it, it even said so in the paper" Juno- (Now wide awake) WHAT?! GIVE ME THE PAPER! Gloria gives Juno the paper and he begins to read Juno- " Yesterday afternoon a murder happened at the Coffee Shop on the corner of Jinkura and Sanobe.... The murder was caught by the clever deduction of Chief Chie Masako with the help of Juno Kautso" Juno-" With the help? I solve that whole case by myself. And why is my name spelled wrong? I freakin spelled it out for her in case in got into the paper.(Juno like Rodney Dangerfield) I get no respect, no respect at all" Gloria- "Now, now aren't we being a little dramatic?" Juno-" If i see that Chief, I’ll let her have it I will. So why did you come to my room? You could have just as easily waited till i came down stairs to yell at me." Gloria-" My you are perceptive. That’s right, I came to tell you that your friend called to tell you that he got two tickets to this mystery weekend thing." Juno- (Like a little fanboy) Oh my God! Daisuke got tickets to the Annual Detective Mystery Weekend Summit, A.D.M.W.S for those in the know. When did he call?" Gloria-" About an hour ago, he said that he will be waiting at the spot around 10:15" Juno-" 10:15, that’s in 30 mins!" Gloria-"Well I can dri.." Before she can finish Juno gets dressed and bolts out of the house. He's fast when he needs to be Juno arrives at the spot in front of "The Burrito House". He likes Burritos. Juno-" Hey Dai!" Daisuke-" Yo Juno, took you long enough Daisuke Genkichi Blood Type- A Height- 5'8 Weight- 142lbs Juno-" Dai how did you get the tickets? I thought they were only giving it out to only a thousand people? Daisuke-" Oh you’re right, I killed 2 men and took their tickets." Juno-" Hmmph, that’s unfortunate for their families, well we better enjoy the time there so there deaths won't be in vain." Daisuke-" Yeah." Daisuke and Juno then proceed to laugh. They have a sarcastic and dark sense of humor, which is why they have been friends since childhood. Juno-" No seriously though how did you get them" Daisuke-" Some dude gave them to me and made me promise to get one to you?" Juno-" Really? That’s weird. Did he tell you anything else?" Daisuke- “No not really, he just gave them to me and left. I wonder how he found out where is live?” Juno- “Who cares?” Daisuke-“Right. Well there’s the bus, let’s get on it.” Juno and Daisuke get on the bus and arrive at a huge mansion that happens to be in an isolated area. Juno-“ You know its kinda weird for such a huge house to be in a place like this.” Daisuke-“I’ll say, with all that money I wonder why they would build out here, but who cares.” Juno-“Right, let’s go inside and meet the others.” Juno and Daisuke go inside the mansion where 998 people are conversing Juno and Daisuke- “Ho-ly Crap!” Daisuke-“ Juno there are so many people here.” Juno-“ I know but best of all there’s…” Juno & Daisuke-“ SO MANY GIRLS!” Daisuke- “ I know look at the back on that one! And check out those racks! And there faces, I think I am in heaven. Juno? Juno?” Juno is fixated on a girl across the room wearing very sophisticated but also slightly revealing outfit. Juno- (Dreamily) “ Wow I could just stand here and objectify her all day.” Daisuke- “ Hey Juno! Get over here, the host is about to make his speech.” A huge door opens and a man of small stature walks through the door Host- Good evening, I am Genza Takana and I will be your host for this year’s ADMWS. Now I know all of you are ready to go, but you will have to wait until tomorrow morning. I suggest that you all get to know each other and get to bed soon. Good night.” Juno walks over to the girl he was looking at earlier Juno- “ So this mansion is pretty big.” Girl-“ Yeah though I wonder why a mansion would be in such a location as this?” Juno-“ Hey that’s the same thing I was thinking. Strange. By the way my name is Juno Katsuo.” Girl- “That name, wasn’t it in the paper this morning? By the way my name is Hanako Blackwood.” Juno- “ Hanako Blackwood, why does that name sound familiar? Anyways how is Britain?” Hanako-“ Excuse me?” Juno-“ Your from Britain right? Your accent isn’t fully gone but your Japanese is perfect, so that tells me that you lived here and you are from Britain and you were taught Japanese. I noticed that your pitch when speaking Japanese sounded like you were trying to get reacquainted with the language.” Hanako-“ My, my aren’t you the perceptive one. What else can you tell by just looking at me?” Juno-“ Well its too crowded down here and it would be easier in a less noisy place say a place like your room or mine.” Hanako-“You work pretty quick don’t you?” Juno-“Well I…” The lights go out and everyone starts to scream Hanako- “Do you hear that noise” Juno-“ Do you smell that?” Hanako-“ What on earth are you talking about?” The lights turn back on and a body is impaled into the wall by a Scythe with words written in his blood on the wall: You Shall Not Escape From Your Fate- Phantom Hand Juno- “Phantom?” Hanako-“Hand?”
End of File 4
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Post by gamersgateway on Sept 30, 2006 4:00:46 GMT -5
CooL Detective Story........ Can't wait to read the rest of the story ..........
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Post by halfxasleep on Sept 30, 2006 21:46:34 GMT -5
Wow! I think your getting better that was very interesting.
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Post by Kôkaku Kidôtai Tantei on Oct 1, 2006 20:22:10 GMT -5
Very Good I like it...
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