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Post by Haibara on Jan 6, 2005 17:21:30 GMT -5
I am trying to write a fan fic! Hope you like it!
Chapter 1- I miss you, Oneechan...
'Ring Ring.....' The bell at tentan elementry school has just gone. Haibara walked out of the class room staring at the floor.
"Nightmares again." She said quitely to herself.
Life have changed for her... for ever... from the day that her sister Akemi died. " Doshite, doshite oneechan?" (doshite=why)
"Oi, Haibara." Came a voice behind her. She turn around and to her surprise, she saw Edogawa Conan standing behind her.
" What are you doing here, Kudo kun?" She asked coldly.
"Baka," Conan said impatently. "Class was just dissmissed! Haibara what's in to you?"
"None of your business, leave me alone!" And with that she turned around and walked away leaving Conan standing there looking confused.
"What a person." Conan mumbled to himself. " Is she having a hard time again?"
As Haibara turned into the road of Dr Agasa's house, she stopped and leaned against the wall. *Oneechan, why did you leave me... I...I..." She broke up in tears thinking about her sister. " Oneechan..." She sobed.
"Haibara, daijobuka?"(Are you alright?)
"Kudo kun?"
"I came to see Dr Agasa... Why are you still here?"
"I wanted to stay by myself for a while."
Conan sighed and walked up to her. "You are thinking about your oneesan, Akemi san right?"
"Kudo, how did you..."
"Because you were calling her name."
"Kudo!" Haibara said firencely. "You haven't been spying on me have you?"
"No...No... How can I? He heh..."
Haibara turned around to go, but Conan grabed her by the arm.
"Don't get mad, I was worried, and I came to check on you."
Haibara looked up at Conan. "Arigato Kudo kun. Daijobuyo." (I'm all right) "It's not early, you have to go back now. Or Mouri san would be worried about you... Mata ashita... (see you tomorrow)
"Oi chyotto matte Haibara!" (wait)Conan shouted after her, but she had already gone.
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I had a try! Please tell me what you think about it!
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Post by stargazing on Jan 6, 2005 17:40:56 GMT -5
Wow!! Continue writing puh-leaaaaasssse??
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Post by goldenXeyes on Jan 6, 2005 17:42:47 GMT -5
cool!! keep writting
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Post by Haibara on Jan 6, 2005 18:23:29 GMT -5
Ok!^^
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Chapter 2-I have to hid it... Deep inside...
Haibara walked into the house and strianght to the study room. She sat down beside the computer... and turned it on. For year and years it was the only thing she had done. Working and working... On the computer... She got a shiever in the bones, and a voice said in her brain. Welcome back, Sherry! Welcome back, Sherry! Sherry...! Sherry...!
"Ah..." She cried out. "No!"
'Beep' The sound from the computer woke her up from her throughts. "I was only imaging it..." She said softly. "Baka ne... watashi... (what a dummy I am) It's not possible that Gin and Vermouth can find me like this..."
She turned to the computer and started to work.
At the house Dr Agasa has just finished his shower, and sat down at the couch when the door bell rang.
"Oh Shinichi." Dr Agasa greeted.
"Hakasei, is Haibara back yet?
"Ai kun is in the study I think. Is something wrong?"
"I think she's....Never mind...I'll just go and tell her something"
'knock knock'
"Dare?" (who)
"Oi Haibara?"
"Kudo Kun? Matte!" (wait)
Ai opened the door, but stood at the door.
"What do you want?"
"I have something to tell you... Well... it's for myself but... you are the only person that can help me..."
"Come in then."
Conan sat down in a arm chair and looked at Ai... then he noticed the computer, with lot's of figures on it.
"Haibara," He started. "I need you to make another antidole for me... Is that possible?"
Haibara looked blankly at Conan, and after a long time of silence she said " Why?"
"Because.... because... I need to solve a case... and I must be in the form of Shinichi... even if it's just a while... Also because Ran... She is suspusious again... So I..."
"So you thought about coming to me for help?" Haibara cut him off.
"I wanted to ask you days ago... But you seemed so upset... So I didn't... But today when I got home, Ran was sitting there... asking me if I am Shinichi... I just can't bear lying to her anymore... I told her that I would let her see Shinichi again."
"Ok..." Ai said quitely. "I'll help"
"Really? Haibara? Thank you! I thought you would say no!
"But." Haibara said suddenly. "You have to do something for me too!"
"Ok... What is it? Conan said, a little disappointed. "
I want you tomorrow to go to the school field at lunch and run 10 laps for me."
"Why??" Conan asked, alittle shocked.
"Because I have to see how much you can take... your heart rate under the effect of the drug. So I know what percent of antidole I need for you... and not kill you.
She walked out of the room at those words and shut the door behind her.
"Oi oi, what a scary women." Conan said after her.
Ai walked into her room, and layed on her bed. "Kudo kun," she thought to herself. "You don't get it do you? Because... Mouri san is all you can see...and all you care about... I am... I am nothing to you either then the antidole maker....
She sobed to herself quitely not knowing that Conan is outside her door listening.
"Gomenasai... Haibara..." He said quitely, and walked away.
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Another chapter! I hope it's going well! Feel free to give me any comments or suggestions!
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Post by stargazing on Jan 6, 2005 18:35:14 GMT -5
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Continue! It's a great story
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Post by goldenXeyes on Jan 6, 2005 18:35:30 GMT -5
lol it scares me every now and then bc of AixConan but it's RLLY good! plz go on and write asap!! ;D
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Post by Haibara on Jan 6, 2005 23:46:44 GMT -5
^^ can't help it much 'cause I'm a Ai fan!! But I'm not really a AixConan fan... But in my fan fics I slide that way... ^^'
I need to think of something! I'll wirte more when I've got an idea!
I really hope it's going all right ^^
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Post by Mahotou on Jan 6, 2005 23:57:49 GMT -5
*auplaudes*
;D ;D ;D
VERY good Japanese!!
The way they all address each other is Perfect!
And the fact of Little Japanese here and there makes the story feel right
because i watch and read the Japanese conan ^^
((just a note...
Conan/shinichi usually says 'Baro'/Ba~ro Instead of 'baka'...
and Also he usually says 'Suman' Instead of 'Gomenasai'))
Everything else is
KAMPEKI-DESU!! (Perfect!)
And the fact that you translate it for people is really nice!
^^
Keep going please!! ^^
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Post by Haibara on Jan 7, 2005 0:01:25 GMT -5
Arigato!
I just wasn't sure how to spell them so I didn't use them! Does Shinichi say something like wari? Or is it warui?? ^^'
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Post by Mahotou on Jan 7, 2005 0:09:43 GMT -5
Warui! Yep! ;D ((The fallowing stuff is me blabing about nothing ^^)) It translate to ''my bad''  Like once he says "Warui na, Ran!" (my bad Ran!) In the Movie 7 in his memory of when he was suppose to meet her but was late. ^^ ;D ;D |
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Post by Haibara on Jan 7, 2005 0:12:58 GMT -5
OK! Thanks!
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Post by stargazing on Jan 7, 2005 15:49:23 GMT -5
*pacing* Write more soon!
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Post by Haibara on Jan 9, 2005 2:15:58 GMT -5
Ok here is the 3rd chapter!
Chapter 3- Ran... Ore wa...Ore wa...
When Conan got home, he found Ran siting on the couch, staring blankly into space.
"Tadaima Ran neechan!" (I'm back)
Ran looked up at him and smiled weakly. "Conan kun, suwatte kudasai." (please sit down)
"Ran nee chan?" Conan said softly, "Daijobika?"(Are you alright?)
"Arigato Conan kun, Daijobuyo." (thanks, I'm alright)
Conan sat down on the couch next to Ran and looked up at her.
"Conan kun, I think it's time that you tell me the truth." Ran said, not looking at Conan.
"Ran neechan, what do you mean?"
"Conan kun, you know what I mean!"
"Iie."(no)
Ran looked at Conan. "Anata wa Shinichi desuka?" (are you Shinichi)
Conan stared at Ran, but stayed quite.
"Conan kun? Answer me!" Ran said. Tears started to fall down her cheeks.
"Ran, I can't tell you." Conan thought. "If only Haibara can make the antidole now... This won't be happening."
Ran stood up and said "you can't tell me? Conan kun... watashi..."(I)
"Ran neechan, I am not Shinichi niichan." Conan sdaid quitely. He didn't want to lie to Ran, but what other choice does he have? He needs time, Haibara needs time... This is all he can do now.
"Demo..." Ran started. " You and Shinichi are so alike... You know almost everything about him... That I never knew... Conan kun... Tell me the truth... Ireally love Shinichi, I..."
"Ran neechan, honto desuka? (Really?)
"Conan kun..."
"How can I hid it now?" Conan thought again. "I can't have Ran being so upset... I can't lie to her. But if I tell her, then she would be in grave danger..."
Ran stared at Conan, then bent down and picked him up and held him in her arms.
"Conan kun, tell me." Ran looked Conan straight in the eye and seemed to see through him.
"Ran... " Conan slowly took of his glasses and held them in his hands. "Ore wa... Ore wa..."
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How does that sound? That's the third chapter! I know it's mainly ShinRan romance now... Hehe ^^' I do change alot in my story I guess...
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Post by Mahotou on Jan 9, 2005 9:20:40 GMT -5
WHAT WHAT WHAT!?!!?!!?
CLIFF HANGER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(*falls of cliff*)
(One miss spelling... You said domo instead of demo(for but)^_~)
Love it!! ^^
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Post by Haibara on Jan 9, 2005 15:58:04 GMT -5
Thanks Sensei! I'll go and change it! Cliff hangers? I love them!
*grabs sensei just in time and pulls her up*
Come on, don't die! I need someone to help me with my japanese!
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